{"id":451,"date":"2023-10-22T19:10:18","date_gmt":"2023-10-23T02:10:18","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/?p=451"},"modified":"2023-10-22T19:10:19","modified_gmt":"2023-10-23T02:10:19","slug":"revised-outline-for-part-1-of-kingdom-of-fief","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/revised-outline-for-part-1-of-kingdom-of-fief\/","title":{"rendered":"Revised Outline for Part 1 of Kingdom of Fief"},"content":{"rendered":"\n

I realized while drafting Part 1 of Kingdom of Fief<\/em>, a medieval comedy-fantasy I’ve been working on for the past few months, that the protagonist’s desire line isn’t strong enough to propel the story forward.<\/p>\n\n\n\n

So this week, I revised it. I wanted to make her immediate goal more clear and to cut the timeline down to one action-packed day.<\/p>\n\n\n\n

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Here’s the revised Part 1 outline:<\/p>\n\n\n\n

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1) Lester arrives by bus\/ride share, loses his bag, sees Beady in the bushes, Aliyah refuses him entrance<\/p>\n\n\n\n

2) Aliyah shows Lester her room, her KoF collection, Lester questions her obsession (to go to KoF to be knighted), Aliyah calls out Lester for being a knave (cowardly, dishonorable, faithless)<\/p>\n\n\n\n

3) packages arrives, Aliyah has Lester fetch it, while they\u2019re unpacking the armor, parents catch them, Lester covers for Aliyah, parents threaten to cancel trip to KoF<\/p>\n\n\n\n

4) next morning, Lester wakes, see Beady outside again, discovers that Aliyah, in her armor, stayed up all night praying to Tinkle [?]<\/p>\n\n\n\n

5) bus to school \u2014 Aliyah has Lester carry a case to school, they get school bus, Aliyah in full armor (Tinkle tucked into her breastplate)<\/p>\n\n\n\n

6) home room \u2014 Skippy & his henchmen interrogate Lester, try to prank Aliyah, she challenges them to a duel to the death, teacher has no record of Lester, Aliyah \u201cvouches\u201d for him<\/p>\n\n\n\n

7) math class \u2014 tips as percentages lesson, balks at schoolwork, language arts class \u2014 Aliyah balks at Connecticut Yankee, democracy, middle-class pragmatism<\/p>\n\n\n\n

8) afternoon \u2014 prepping for Med Faire, Aliyah arms herself with sword in case, Lester learns its origins \u2014 maybe its an authentic relic (which turns out to be replica), Skippy antagonizes her \u2014 parents visit her in tent \u2014 confront her about armor \u2014 how much it costs \u2014 cancel KoF trip<\/p>\n\n\n\n

9) joust \u2014 Skippy taunts Aliyah (she refuses any advantage), defeats her by a dirty trick, Aliyah draws her sword, breaks it, disqualified<\/p>\n\n\n\n

10) principal\u2019s office (with parents) \u2014 punishment, after school cleanup duty, Uncle Mo asks Lester to look after her<\/p>\n\n\n\n

11) dumpster \u2014 Skippy & his henchmen haze Lester, Aliyah vanquishes them, Beady invites Aliyah to \u201creal\u201d KoF for \u201creal\u201d knighting, she accepts, Lester jumps with her down the magic portal<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

I realized while drafting Part 1 of Kingdom of Fief, a medieval comedy-fantasy I’ve been working on for the past few months, that the protagonist’s desire line isn’t strong enough to propel the story forward. So this week, I revised it. I wanted to make her immediate goal more clear and to cut the timeline … Read more<\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"closed","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"_coblocks_attr":"","_coblocks_dimensions":"","_coblocks_responsive_height":"","_coblocks_accordion_ie_support":"","footnotes":""},"categories":[4,8,3],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-451","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-craft","category-fiction","category-process","no-featured-image-padding"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/451","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=451"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/451\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":452,"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/451\/revisions\/452"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=451"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=451"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/seanmiller.us\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=451"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}